Writing Introductions- Source Project
Step one:After reviewing your notes and the blog post titled Introductions, re-read your introduction for your source paper . Try and re-write your introduction using a " hook" that can be categorized as one of the following: Direct Quotation, Description, Anecdote or Illustration, Deliberate Contradiction, Statistic or Startling Fact or Idea or a mixture of these methods. Try and steer clear of the common definition or question. Post the first couple of sentences of your new introduction here. Remember that your introduction has two purposes: (1) to attract the reader to your subject and (2) to establish your claim.
Step two:
Please read one of your classmates responses and comment on their "hook" and how it attracted you as a reader . Use the reply button to comment on your classmates post.
Kevin Mangan
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Have you been victimized by the wrongdoings of social media? Teenagers have developed an addiction to social media. They feel lonelier than they ever have before, which leads to them having lots of social anxiety.
the hook attracted me because after the first sentence I started to think of moments of the wrongdoings of social media and how it could lead to problems like anxiety which I never really thought of.
DeleteCraig Hanna
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This hook attracted me because I really thought about the negative effects social media has had on my life. Increased social media use has caused me to feel somewhat lonely, depressed, and caused an increase in anxiety for me.
Matthew Newman
DeleteThis was a good hook. When I read it, it made me thinking about social media for a second. It makes the reader want to read more of your paper.
Kain Colter, Quarterback at NorthWestern University had an aspiration to complete his pre-med major and become a doctor until he was advised by the staff of the University to drop his major. They believed the major’s class requirements were too hard and that if he did not drop it, that it would take up the time that should be dedicated to football.
ReplyDeleteThe hook was amazingly inspiring for a professional quarterback to complete his major and become a doctor to help him drop his major. And the people believing that is was too hard for him was the cherry on top.
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DeleteMichael Turturro
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Hannaan Ismail
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My attention was caught by this hook because it started off like the text intro of a movie. Also, the word quarterback caught my eye and I am a big fan of football.
Joscar Rivera
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This hook was really interesting because it starts off by giving a story of a dq college athlete and the decisions they had to make because of their coaches.
Craig Hanna
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Did you know that male soccer players sometimes make over 100 times more than what female soccer players make? The top paid male soccer player in the world, Leonel Messi, made $141 million in 2019 while the top paid female soccer player, Carli Lloyd, made only $519,000. Women are paid less despite having just as much skill as men have and bring in just as many views to broadcasting companies as men's soccer. Men and women in soccer should be paid the same.
Tommy Russell
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The hook does a good job to make someone want to read what you wrote. The topic of different pay between male and female soccer players is very interesting.
The statistics used in the hook caught my attention because the pay difference between the two players is extremely significant. After doing the math, Messi made about 271 times the amount of Lloyd yet she makes half a million.
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Michael Matthews
DeleteIt was interesting to learn about the difference of pay between males and females. The hook caused the reader to want to know more about this topic
Matthew Newman
ReplyDeleteFirst responders around the country are always helping others, but now they need our help.Being a first responder is a very difficult and dangerous job. They do and see things that no other person would want to and this causes severe mental illness. 37% of firefighters deal with PTSD and 29% deal with substance abuse. Police officers are 5 times more likely to develop PTSD than the general population. EMS personnel have constant exposure to trauma, life threatening situations that negatively affect their mental health and increases the risk of PTSD and substance abuse.
This hook attracted me because it is interesting to see what impact dealing with serious situations does to first responders and police officers.
DeleteMichael Turturro
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According to EI-P,"Personally more so than shock, I think, rap music has to be born of rebellion." EI-P means that rap music is violent like a rebellion is. As a result to Rap Music getting popular, Rap-artists portray violence in America.
Tommy Russell
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Did you know that playing video games can help with cognitive and other skills? It might seem like video games are just for fun but there is potential promise for video games to improve health outcomes particularly in areas of psychological therapy and physical therapy. .
This hook caught my attention because you started off by using fact that people may not know. It can intrigue readers to want to learn more about the topic
DeleteClint Aupont
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The government should spend your hard earn tax money to invest in new ways to harvest the full potentials that space has to offer but you may ask why this might be of concern to you or why you should contribute to such a cause, the truth of the matter is that space exploration and innovation will be imperative thanks to the technology we use everyday.
Kevin Mangan
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This hook caught my attention because usually our tax money is not used for space travel. It makes the reader want to know the potential of investing more money into space travel.
Michael Matthews
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To many people social media is important as it plays a great role in our lives. Social media users’ concerns about their privacy have spiked in recent years due to the numerous Incidents of data breaches. That’s why privacy on social media has never been more crucial.
Have you ever been socially cancelled before? The term “cancel culture” can be defined as the modern form of ostracism in which an individual is excluded from society, whether it's in the real world or via social media. This toxic trend has taken teens by storm and has caused adolescent teens suicide and depression rates to skyrocket this past year. Young kids cancelling one another on social networking apps has become a common factor in the way adolescence are misusing social media.
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Most people don't like talking about athletes kneeling during the anthem because it can be a controversial topic. But this topic needs to be talked about more, it can help develop a change for police brutality throughout America.
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You walk into a classroom and the first thing you see all the students looking down at their desks on their iPads. Instead of the teacher verbally teaching, she/he is making the student watch YouTube videos for the lesson of the day. That is how schools are now teaching their curriculum in the year 2020.
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In the school year 2016-17 there were a total of 98,158 public schools that were open in the United States. Of all of these schools, 66,837 were elementary grade schools, 23,814 were secondary or high school, and 6,783 of these schools were combined which means they are k-12 schools. This amounted for the total of 50.7 million students enrolled in school for public elementary and secondary schools in the year 2017. According to (Gale 2019), the national center for education statistics, about 20 percent of all public schools required their students to wear a school uniform in the 2017 school year
David Lettal
ReplyDeleteMany people in New York are pulled over by police and stopped and frisked every year, however people of color are stopped and frisked more in New York then non people of color
Saurabh Subash Chand
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Did you know that two Maryland cities have effectively extended municipal voting rights to sixteen and seventeen year olds ? The lowering of the voting age to sixteen increases voter turnout and develops lifelong voting habits. The young people are optimized enough and have the ability to make good voting decisions. The voting age must be lowered to sixteen.
This one sounds incredible because we've been hearing for years that the future of politics is in the hands of young people and also increasing voting power can have a significant impact on election outcomes.
DeleteThis one sounds amazing because we've heard for years that young people hold the key to the future of politics, and that increasing voter influence will have a huge effect on election results.
DeleteSaurabh Subash Chand
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This hook caught my attention because women are not getting education as men. They are suffering without education and are unaware of numerous things. The women deserve to be educated.
Mikayla Henderson
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Did you know the school systems are failing to properly educate students for real-world situations and careers? Especially the fact is that teachers’ unions have political agendas that only positively impacts the teachers and causes students to be dumbed down and has been causing decreases in graduation rates and test score. It has had a huge effect especially on inner city schools because they are already a part of an already marginalized community because of how socially and economically separate they are. Students need to be prioritized and be taught the basic skills in order to be successful in their futures.
Dylan Perez
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Have you ever realized how difficult it is to get a job in the engineering field in modern day due to high technology and machines? Back in the day it was still difficult to get a spot in the engineering field but not as difficult as it is in modern day. The tasks needed be completed can absolutely be done by humans with the proper skills and knowledge but if machines keep on being made for specific tasks almost every person will eventually lose their job. For the use of machines and high technology is more harmful to people than helping them with their own jobs.
Joanna Cuenca
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Did you know that having a vegan diet will lower the chance of getting diabetes? Diabetes creates complications that can end deadly. One in ten people have diabetes in American which 88 million American adults.
great hook, makes me want to keep reading and learn how going vegan can benefit your health and overall make you feel better.
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ReplyDeleteIn India, only 4 out of every 10 people living in poverty attend college after high school. Poverty has an effect on a child's college readiness in a number of ways, including health and home life. Children from low-income families are often denied stimulation, and their financial situation has a negative impact on the country's literacy rate.
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DeleteV.Chandra Swaroop Reddy
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This hook was amazing because todays education system is falling to prepare students for the real-world situations. I have read in the newspaper that 'The name of the dog is Puppy'. This seems like a simple sentence. But in Kenya, Tanzania, and Uganda, three out of four third grade students do not understand it? In rural India, nearly three-quarters of third graders cannot solve a two-digit subtraction problem such as 46 minus 17, and by grade five — half still cannot do so.
V.Chandra Swaroop Reddy
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Did u know that Music is the goo kind of distraction. While the study did suggest there's more to it than distraction, working out with music did make participants less aware of their exertion, put up your efforts. Music puts you "in the zone" and can elevate your mood. A good beat can help you keep pace.
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ReplyDeleteDid u know About 60% of seats are reserved in India for various sections like ST, SC, OBC, and EWS with respect to Higher Education Institutions. 3% of seats are also reserved for differently-abled persons across all categories. This also means that only 40% of seats are available under merit. In the merit seats, not only the general category candidates but all other categories like SC, ST, OBC, and EWS can also compete.
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ReplyDeleteInjuries are very common in the world we live in today, whether you are playing a sport, doing yard work, or just jogging around the block, you can get injured at any time, everyone has experienced it. Physical therapy is a great way to recover from these injuries, specifically, ultrasound therapy.
the hook is good and physical therapy is great.
DeleteJames Fazio
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Did you know that most kids from kindergarten all the way through high school aren't properly prepared for the workforce. Kids tend to be very creative, however, the American education system teaches you until to sit in a desk and memorize certain answers to get through a class.